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Some people feel that manufacturers and super markets have the responsibility to reduce the amount of packaging of goods. Other agree that customers should avoid buying goods with a lot of packaging. Discuss both views, and give your opinion.

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The over-packaging of products selling in the markets is becoming more serious nowadays,
although
 some people say it should be minimized the packages from the manufacturing side, I believe that consumers should be avoiding purchasing goods with lots of packaging. On one side, the manufacturers, especially in the food industries, produce their foods in individual wraps.
This
 is because the demand for the individual package product has higher demand by customers.
For example
, the value pack of potato chips including more than one favour is more popular than the singular favour of chips under the same price in the supermarket, while consumers have a higher enjoyable experience trying different favours,
moreover
, the individual packaging can
enables
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 the chips to remain crispy. With
this
 in mind, the market demand has driven the manufacturers to put more wraps on their goods. On the face of it when people suggest that manufacturing companies should be responsible for reducing the packing, I believe the end users should indeed take more responsibility for changing their buying behaviour. Given that the consumer can buy a proper size of the product to fulfil his actual need, the family size of the excessive amount of food as well as the unnecessary packing can be reduced.
For instance
,
instead
 of going to the supermarket that sells products in huge sizes
such
 as Cosco, there are some newly introduced shops which promote naked packages, which means the customers going to these shops should prepare their own containers, while the goods in there are counted in grams that people can buy on whatever quantity they require.
In other words
, the need for packing can be eliminated. In conclusion, under
this
 line of thinking, the end users can initiate the change of reducing packages of products by changing their purchasing habits.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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