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Nowadays more and more older people who need employment have to compete with younger people for the same jobs.

#people #employment #jobs
Younger
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 generation
have
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 many advantages to find a job than elder
people
 in our time.
Although
 it causes some problems, there are various methods that can tackle
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this
 situation Senior
people
 have
much
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experience
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 than teenagers, so it can lead to some issues to prefer young
people
 in companies. Lack of
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skills is one of the main reasons that leaders need to work with senior
people
.
However
, the regime can balance
this
 situation with open new workplaces Another reason lies in the fact that the cost of living is increasing, that's why
people
 have to work to pay their expenses even after they retired. To tackle
with
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this
 problem government should increase pension payments for elder
people
, so they don’t need to earn money To sum up,
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the older
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 generation
face
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to
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some difficulties to find
new
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 job. To solve
this
 governments should understand both sides and maintain the balance.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Intergenerational competition
  • Age discrimination
  • Adaptability
  • Hiring practices
  • Workforce diversity
  • Upskilling
  • Lifelong learning
  • Flexible working arrangements
  • Ageism
  • Technological proficiency
  • Productivity concerns
  • Diverse skillsets
  • Legislative protection
  • Employment equity
  • Biases
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