Do you agree or disagree with the following statement the desire for higher status or greater wealth then others is what motivates most people to succeed in the word. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement ?
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is often argued
greater
affluent (rich) or high social level is more influential than others among Correct article usage
the greater
people
be successful around the world. I totally agree with Use synonyms
this
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job
satisfaction and personal fulfilment Use synonyms
a
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apply
important
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more important
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.
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following
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job
satisfaction is very weak Correct word choice
and job
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money
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motivate
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motivates
people
, yet, the reality is actually not convincing. There is no exact number Use synonyms
how
many Change preposition
of how
people
should earn, even if research were unlimited, it would be difficult to identify if someone is successful. Another point to make is that when employees who focus Use synonyms
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too
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on
money
prevent themselves Use synonyms
for
enjoying their Change preposition
from
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makes Use synonyms
even
worse for the Correct pronoun usage
it even
company
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company's
For instance
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regular
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his regular
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the possible explanation is that with Use synonyms
the
time he learnt to do the Correct article usage
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has
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have
different
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a different
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people
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same
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the same
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interests
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has
different motivation source while they are working. Having more wealth Change the verb form
have
not
only Add a missing verb
is not
biggest
factor but Correct article usage
the biggest
also
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people
desire to have more respect from society. I have a friend who is Use synonyms
teacher
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a teacher
the teacher
very
clever person. His university exam result was enough to be Add an article
a very
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doctor
. To do so he could have more wealth, since, Add an article
a doctor
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the doctor
doctor
salary Change noun form
doctor's
far
more than Add a missing verb
is far
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the teacher
teacher
salary. He Change noun form
teacher's
prefer
to be Change the verb form
prefers
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doctor
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a doctor
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doctor
. He said that I want to raise Use synonyms
up
children. He Change preposition
apply
believe
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believes
in
that being Change preposition
apply
teacher
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taught
job
in the world.
In conclusion, we can’t refuse the power of Use synonyms
money
how Use synonyms
motivate
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to motivate
the
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apply
people
. But it is not Use synonyms
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people
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withagree
money
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motivate
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motivates
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people
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them
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themselves
,
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apply
people
will realise that while they are earning big amount of Use synonyms
money
they will lose a lot of something in their life when if they insist on that goal.Use synonyms
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