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ĐỀ 1: In many counties, more and more people are staying at home to look after their children when women work full time. What are the reasons? Is it a positive or negative development?

#counties #people #home #children #women #work #time #development
Earlier generation
women
 were married at an early stage like 18 and they were not going to school because they did not have enough money, and there was not proper family planning so it was very difficult for them to spend money on each and every child to send them school and give them a good education. But nowadays and in many countries, not only in India but every other country housewives
work
 full time. The main reason for it is that some
families
 are orthodox
families
 who want their daughter-in-law to stay home do all the house chores and cook food take care of
families
 rather
going
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 out and working. They think only men can earn and will run the house. Even if a girl is well qualified, some
families
 do not allow their daughters to go and
work
 leaving all the chores. But some
of
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the
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families
 allow their daughters to go out earn and have the support of their
husband
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husbands
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 to
work
 and become
independent
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an independent
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woman
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women
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 who can take care of their expenses their house and their
children
. They not only earn some pennies but
also
 make their parents and in-laws happy and proud. There are so many successful
woman
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women
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 who is married and have kids and
also
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 a face to those
women
.
For example
,
actor
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an actor
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 like Kareena Kapoor Khan, who is married and
have
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has
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 two
children
 who are small but
take
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takes
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 care of them and
also
work
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works
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 very hard to earn for her
children
 and for her family and to give her best for her
children
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children's
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 education and their lives. Some
women
who
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think they cannot achieve anything in their lives and
they
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are only made to look after their
home
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homes
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. It obviously gives a positive impact
to
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 all
women
 and encourages them to do at least a small business which makes them take the very
first
 step to their success. The recommendation is that every
women
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woman
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is
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are
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 good unique and successful in their
lives
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life
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 all the need is
a
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good support along with a family who will understand why it is important for a
woman
 to be
independent
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an independent
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woman
 will always keep a balance
of
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in
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 her
live
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 and her family as well as her
children
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Gender roles
  • Societal norms
  • Flexible gender roles
  • Masculinity
  • Fatherhood
  • Economic considerations
  • Earning potential
  • Workplace flexibility
  • Telecommuting
  • Maternity leave policies
  • Childcare costs
  • Economical
  • Work-life balance
  • Family well-being
  • Upbringing
  • Career satisfaction
  • Professional growth
  • Domestic responsibilities
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