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With a growing population, many people believe that we should focus on producing more GM food. What are the advantages and disadvantages of doing this? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

#population #people #focus #gm #food
In
this
 modern era, a variety of
food
 supplies are available at any instant. Due to
increasing
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 population around the world, many people think that it must be more focused on genetically modified (GM)
food
 production.
This
 essay will discuss the benefits and drawbacks of
such
 genetically engineered consumables. To commence with, the major advantage is that it is
a
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more nutritive compared to others
food
 components. Nowadays, most
of
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the
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crops are grown with the excessive use of pesticides and fertilizers which sometimes makes the crop poisonous.
For instance
, in present days, fertilizers used in agriculture have
large
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 amount of chemical content that directly
affect
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 the
food
 product.
In addition
 to that,
this
 type of modified
food
 has medical benefits and
also
reduce
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 cause
for
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food
 protection.
Accordingly
, these possibilities make GM
food
 more productive and advantageous. On the flip hand, the foremost disadvantage is that it may cause allergic reactions in
human
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 body. It states that genetic modifications add or
mixes
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 unwanted proteins that might
result
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 allergies in some individuals.
For example
, there are people whose
body
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bodies
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 reject certain
kind
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kinds
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 of elements of
food
 which
visible
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are visible
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 as bodily irritations.
Therefore
, the reform
to
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food
 products might affect the immune system of humans.
Furthermore
, it is
also
 not safe to consume them because of the possibility of
new
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disease
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diseases
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as a result
 of using different bacteria and viruses,
thus
, chemical reactions inside the body may bring different
sickness
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sicknesses
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 adding
further
 reasons for the list of negativities. To conclude, genetically modified products have both pros and cons. The advantages are that it is
nutritious
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the nutritious
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 and
reduced
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cost
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the cost
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 of
food
 production while the disadvantages include the allergic reaction in humans and the emergence of new diseases.
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