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Every year several languages die out. Some people think this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages. To what extent do u agree or disagree with this opinion.

#year #languages #people #life
Nowadays, it is a fact that some of the
languages
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 gradually disappeared due to the level of
its
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difficulty or the dropping in the number of
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 users. In
this
 case, surely there are huge benefits to the
world
 even though some people would argue that it is destroying the uniqueness of each country and its own ancient culture.
Firstly
, globalization has become a new normal and people are even comparing the
world
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 a village because the speed of information flowing from one place to another is quite fast and in order to be updated and well understood
all
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of them in a short time, having the mutual or universal language or fewer
languages
 is very important and beneficial in
modern
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world
. Another positive aspect is that the fewer the
languages
, the lesser the complications and misunderstandings in communication between different races and countries. It will be much easier to travel around the
world
 and will not have to be worrying about the language barrier anymore and it will
also
 reduce the difficulties of learning the culture of each other. It
also
 has a significant advantage to the learning journey of the young people or students because the students do not have to spare their time anymore a lot on learning
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new
languages
 in order to study
in
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abroad or to get a well-paid job when there is a common language for all the nations in the
world
.
Therefore
, they can more focus on studying their subjects of interest or hobbies. To conclude, it is certainly beneficial to the
world
 if there is
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single or fewer
languages
 to communicate because it will make
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things less complicated and relationships between individuals or different countries will be stronger as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Linguistic diversity
  • Cultural heritage
  • Endangered languages
  • Homogenization
  • Multilingualism
  • Language preservation
  • Cognitive benefits
  • Global communication
  • Intellectual diversity
  • Ecological knowledge
  • Cultural traditions
  • Communication barriers
  • Preservation efforts
  • Technological solutions
  • Language revival
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