Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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food and drink

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measure of

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pricey

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of society

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that

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extent. And I will elaborate

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in the following parts. Some

people

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products

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expensive

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individuals can't afford to buy them and

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they can reduce to use

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exist in all homes.

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everyone can afford them to buy.

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awareness of

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advertisements, helpful programs or something like

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decide for themselves.

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knowledgeable doctors

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they

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can set up to them a food schedule according to their weight and height or

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daily routine. To sum up, after analyzing both sides of the argument, it is not hard to see, it is not fair that we make a decision

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people

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of them, and they should choose with awareness for themselves. The only thing that we can do is enhance the surface of public consciousness.

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Topic Vocabulary:

health problems
manufactured food and drink products
sugary products
excessive sugar consumption
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healthier choices
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increased taxes
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