Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

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Topic Vocabulary:

health problems
manufactured food and drink products
sugary products
excessive sugar consumption
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increased taxes
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Many manufactured food and drink products contain high levels of sugar, which causes many health problems. Sugary products should be made more expensive to encourage people to consume less sugar. Do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

Nowadays, many people choose to be selfemployed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. Why might this be the case? What could be the disadvantage of being selfemployed?

Some people think that newly built houses should follow the style of old houses in local areas. Others think that people should have freedom to build houses of their own style. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

These days, a majority of animals are kept in zoos in order to save them from becoming extinct. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this?

Write a letter to you friend who want to stay at you home, but you will be away on a vacation for a month. Discuss details about the trip and how yo get keys of the apartment

One of the widely discussed issues nowadays is a problem about a traffic on roads around the world. It is undeniable that transportation by the car has become an essential part of our life. However, these days it become much difficult and create a traffic jam.