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People who were born in rural areas often move to big cities when they become adults. What are the reasons for this? Is it a positive or a negative trend?

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A number of individuals tend to action to vast operation after they become teenagers due to avail of the beneficial material of these places ,
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 probably leave the homes where they become grow in childhood rather
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 is a negative trend for sure in the following essay I will explain the reasons for
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, all adolescents do not want to act but their desires provoke them to achieve the things others have so those who are lives in villages do have not the opportunity for well-developed schools,hospitals, and jobs as well and these are the main reasons to oppose them to measure,
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 in rural space the farming is popular in some countries have not high technology to get enormous crops or field and when they sale rice and
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 crops they grow to not get
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 profit which they deserve
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 is disappointing for them and they moves in big cities.
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,when the tendency of people moving to
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 populated areas in search of good food or jobs
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 potentially these areas become more populated out of the range after that they lost facilities or minerals here government should have to improve villages by providing excellent schooling, hospital facilities or provide them technologies to grow the high amount of fields To conclude, in my ,opinion if one nation wants to become prosperous and get
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 in every field if they want success by leaps and bounds
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 they should have to expand their work in parallel with all the facilities which cities provide to these villages
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 after that they cannot move to cities and alone their homes.
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