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nowadays international tourism is the biggest industry in the world.unfortunately international tourism create tension rather than understanding with many people from different culture to go to extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

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Nowadays, the
music
 industry is growing with
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wide-range
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 of
music
 types. Since our birth, we are addicted to
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listen
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music
 because it gives us the utmost feelings of amusement and relaxation. Most
of
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the
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people
 are comfortable with,
in
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listening
traditional
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music
,
however
 some others
also
 like international
music
. In
this
 essay, we will discuss why traditional
music
 is preferred over
the
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international in most
of
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the
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countries.
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Fistly
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First
, listening
music
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 is a way to apart yourself from stressed routines,
to
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 make yourself energized after working or doing something that was required
plethora
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 of attention. And especially traditional
music
 is the remedy because it’s easier to understand and feel for any native.
For instance
, in
2022
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 survey by UCP, it has been found, the
people
 who
listened
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 traditional
music
 were able to solve puzzling conditions as compared to the
one’s
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 who
listened
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 the international
music
.
Therefore
, traditional
music
 is more popular among
people
 in most
of
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the
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countries.
However
, there are set of
people
 everywhere in the world, to like
the
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international
music
, so its importance can’t be denied.
Although
, to
listen
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this
music
 required linguistic skills to understand and cope with the meanings.
Hence
,
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international
music
 is less attention
seeker
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seekers
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 due to
language
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 barrier. To conclude
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this
,
due to
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the language issue of international
music
 and natural
affections
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to
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the
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traditional
music
 makes it indispensable
over
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the international.
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