nowadays international tourism is the biggest industry in the world.unfortunately international tourism create tension rather than understanding with many people from different culture to go to extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Nowadays, the
music
industry is growing with
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of
music
types. Since our birth, we are addicted to
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music
because it gives us the utmost feelings of amusement and relaxation. Most
of
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people
are comfortable with,
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listening
traditional
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music
,
however
some others
also
like international
music
. In
this
essay, we will discuss why traditional
music
is preferred over
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international in most
of
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the
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countries.
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, listening
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is a way to apart yourself from stressed routines,
to
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make yourself energized after working or doing something that was required
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of attention. And especially traditional
music
is the remedy because it’s easier to understand and feel for any native.
For instance
, in
2022
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survey by UCP, it has been found, the
people
who
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traditional
music
were able to solve puzzling conditions as compared to the
one’s
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who
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the international
music
.
Therefore
, traditional
music
is more popular among
people
in most
of
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the
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countries.
However
, there are set of
people
everywhere in the world, to like
the
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international
music
, so its importance can’t be denied.
Although
, to
listen
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this
music
required linguistic skills to understand and cope with the meanings.
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,
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international
music
is less attention
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due to
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barrier. To conclude
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this
,
due to
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the language issue of international
music
and natural
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to
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the
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traditional
music
makes it indispensable
over
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the international.
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