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nowadays international tourism is the biggest industry in the world.unfortunately international tourism create tension rather than understanding with many people from different culture to go to extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion.

Nowadays, the
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 industry is growing with
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wide-range
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 of
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 types. Since our birth, we are addicted to
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listen
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music
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 because it gives us the utmost feelings of amusement and relaxation. Most
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people
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traditional
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music
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,
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 some others
also
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. In
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international in most
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the
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countries.
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, listening
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 is a way to apart yourself from stressed routines,
to
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 make yourself energized after working or doing something that was required
plethora
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 of attention. And especially traditional
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 is the remedy because it’s easier to understand and feel for any native.
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 survey by UCP, it has been found, the
people
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 traditional
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 were able to solve puzzling conditions as compared to the
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 the international
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, traditional
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 is more popular among
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countries.
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 everywhere in the world, to like
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international
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, so its importance can’t be denied.
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, to
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this
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 required linguistic skills to understand and cope with the meanings.
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international
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 is less attention
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 due to
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 barrier. To conclude
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this
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due to
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the language issue of international
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 and natural
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to
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traditional
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 makes it indispensable
over
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the international.

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