With increasing populations and ever-growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty? How can this be solved.

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population
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all over the
world
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it leads to huge development rapidly in many
countries
. And there are
also
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in land management,
government
have to transform some natural resource for
people
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accommodation and economic growth in these
areas
.
First
of all, natural
resource
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,
for instance
,
forest
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forests
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,
water
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bodies in
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the city
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city
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should be protected by everyone because these are
common
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resource
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for everybody in the
countries
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especially
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for citizens in
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area. Because
ecosystem
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around their space could reflect how good of their life quality
.
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many resources, dwellers will find
their
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way to use and add
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all materials. And it can be their career to earn more money too. Another reason is beauty spots in town could become a landmark and support
tourism
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industry in
countries
moreover
it
also
rise up employment rate in
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. There are many
measure
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that can apply to protect interesting places.
However
, it is clear that we should use
naturally
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solutions to prevent
them
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from
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biodiversity loss if we treat them like a tourist
spot
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.
Firstly
,
government
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should increase more protected
areas
and some activities should be banned in
protect
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areas
,
for example
, hunting, fishing ,
making
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loud noise at night.
Secondly
, after we have protected
areas
and
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some
rule
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for
travelers
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government
sector
such
as
forest
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department should
limited
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the number of
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per day and the time for
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open
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or
close
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natural
spot
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in
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some
period
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of
year
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. By doing
this
even
a
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lot of people be around
city
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the ecosystem still healthy. In conclusion, conservation protect
areas
should be prioritized as
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issue of society with effective solutions from
government
act about protected
areas
. Because of economic growth in
countries
, improvement in living for people, and biodiversity in
areas
.
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