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With increasing populations and ever-growing urban centers, many countries are losing their natural beauty spots. What benefits are there to protecting places of natural beauty? How can this be solved.

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of
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population
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 all over the
world
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 it leads to huge development rapidly in many
countries
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. And there are
also
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changing
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 in land management,
government
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 have to transform some natural resource for
people
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 accommodation and economic growth in these
areas
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 of all, natural
resource
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resources
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,
for instance
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forest
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forests
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,
water
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and water
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 bodies in
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the city
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city
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cities
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should be protected by everyone because these are
common
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resource
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resources
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 for everybody in the
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countries
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country
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especially
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 for citizens in
same
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 area. Because
ecosystem
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the ecosystem
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 around their space could reflect how good of their life quality
.
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off
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 many resources, dwellers will find
their
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 way to use and add
value
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the value
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of
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 all materials. And it can be their career to earn more money too. Another reason is beauty spots in town could become a landmark and support
tourism
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the tourism
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 industry in
countries
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moreover
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 it
also
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 rise up employment rate in
cites
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. There are many
measure
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measures
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 that can apply to protect interesting places.
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, it is clear that we should use
naturally
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 solutions to prevent
them
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from
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biodiversity loss if we treat them like a tourist
spot
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spots
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.
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,
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government
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the government
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 should increase more protected
areas
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 and some activities should be banned in
protect
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areas
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 ,
for example
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making
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 loud noise at night.
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, after we have protected
areas
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 and
launch
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 some
rule
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rules
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 for
travelers
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government
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 sector
such
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 as
forest
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the forest
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 department should
limited
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 the number of
tourist
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tourists
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 per day and the time for
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an open
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open
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 or
close
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 natural
spot
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spots
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in
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 some
period
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periods
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 of
year
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the year
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. By doing
this
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 even
a
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lot of people be around
city
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the city
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 the ecosystem still healthy. In conclusion, conservation protect
areas
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 should be prioritized as
main
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 issue of society with effective solutions from
government
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 act about protected
areas
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. Because of economic growth in
countries
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, improvement in living for people, and biodiversity in
areas
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.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

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Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
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  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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