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Nowadays, more people prefer to communicate via text message and email instead of face to face. Why do you think this is the best way? When is face to face communication necessary/

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Currently, there are more and more people with a smartphone, computers,
ipads
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pads
 and
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son
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so
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 on.
That people
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 are using
the
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new technology to get their
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lives
life
life's
lifes
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lives
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more
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easier and they usually prefer to communicate by technology
instead
 of
face
to
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face
.
This
 paper is about how
the
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apply
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text message and
email
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emails
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 could be better to chat with partners. As
i
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I
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 see it,
this
 way of communication is cheaper and faster than
face to
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face
.
For example
, if you stay at home and you want to talk with someone who is a little bit far you only
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needs
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 take the
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phone
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pone
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phone
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 and write
them
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to them
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 without
need
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the need
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 to hold on.
Otherwise
, you should take the car or public transport and spend your money
in
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 fuel or
ticket
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tickets
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 and your time driving.
Also
, if you are looking for a job it will be
more
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faster
send
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to send
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 an email to the
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company's
company
companys
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companies
 rather
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than
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that
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than
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 go to each one.
In addition
, it is usually having friends or family in another city or country and sometimes is not possible to take a flight to see them. In my case, I live in Mallorca and the rest of my family live in Barcelona, so I would like to see them
face
 to
face
 but I can'
t
 always go there.
However
, it isn'
t
 possible to carry on
of
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 that way of communication. If you need to go to the doctor, should be
face to
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face
. Imagine you have some
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illness
ilness
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illness
 and the doctor
check
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 you by a screen. He won'
t
 do a good job. To sum up, we are living in
world
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a world
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 in which we prefer comfortable ways to do our life, and text and emails
they
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apply
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just don'
t
 do it, but they have some benefits to
choose
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 them.
Nevertheless
, we can'
t
 forget that for some important life
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situations
situacions
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situations
 are necessary
face
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to face
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 to
face
with
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apply
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people.
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