Some people work for the same organization all their working life. Others think that it is better to work for different organizations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
Some individuals would like to work for similar companies throughout their working life,
while
others and I believe that switching career spaces is better for them, which can be achieved through working in different companies.
On the one hand, there are some reasons why some employees prefer to avoid changing their organization
. First of all, they think that any change in the workplace can be impacted
their work quality because of the new work environment. Wrong verb form
impact
For example
, somebody who is new in an organization
, perhaps cannot adapt to the new situation quickly which leads to performance reduction. In addition
, working in a new organization
needs
to Verb problem
requires one
relate
with new workers who may have various cultures Verb problem
work
that it
can be hard for some people.
Correct pronoun usage
which
On the other hand
, some individuals and I opine that working for a different organization
is a good choice. Working in a new workspace helps to get new experiences
. It means when someone enters a new company, so, he will have an opportunity to obtain a range of experiences
via working with new colleagues who have great experiences
. Also
, there are new people in this
place who are skilled, and he can connect with these experts in order to improve his skills or abilities. For instance
, he can develop the knowledge which use
in his specific job field.
Wrong verb form
used
To sum up
, employees have their own reasons to stay in the same job or switch careers. However
, some people and I think that changes in working life lead to acquiring new experiences
and developing skills or abilities.Submitted by Masud on
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Task Response: You have addressed the prompt and presented both views effectively. However, ensure a balanced discussion of the views and provide a clear opinion.
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Coherence and Cohesion: The logical structure is generally clear, but there are areas where the logic could be improved, particularly in the development of the opposing views. Ensure cohesive devices are used effectively to connect ideas.
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Lexical Resource: The vocabulary used is fairly varied, but some inaccuracies and lack of precision hinder the communication of ideas. Work on using a wider range of vocabulary and ensure accuracy.
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