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What are advantage and disadvantages of immigration?

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Introduction
There are many negative and
possetive
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positive
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reasons
resounds
resouns
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reasons
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. Progressing at
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job
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the job
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advantage
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an advantage
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 and increasing psychological
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issues
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issues
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a disadvantage
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that
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some people leave in your
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country
contery
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country
for
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accepted
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accepted
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. Having good
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facilities
facilites
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facilities
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might
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request
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canada
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person
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document
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country
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best
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also
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also
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increasing
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salary
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salary
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people
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unemployment
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they
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want
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canada
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was
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Body paragraph 2
On the other disadvantage has some
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reasons
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imigireation
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immigration
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psychological
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psychological
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find
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 that after 2 years in
imigrate
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emigrate
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reading
reasoning
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raising
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Moreover
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making
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friends
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friends
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increasing
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increasing
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dicline
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decline
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who
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 people are in
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immigration
emigration
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immigration
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schedule
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