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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. why do many working people not get enough exercice? what can be done abot this problem?

#people #exercise #time #health #exercice #abot
The bar chart illustrates the proportion of UK adults of different
age
 groups who surfed on the internet over a 3-year period. Overall, it can be seen that the
age
group
 16-24 is the most dominant one over the whole time period.
Also
, adults ages 25-44 and 55-64 are both experiencing progress over the 4 years. Looking at the details, every year for the 16-24
age
group
 was above 80%,
2006
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 even reaching a high of 90%.
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 the
second
 place, the 25-44 adults are all above a percentage of 50, showing a significant increase over the years.
Similarly
, 55-64 aged people appear to have the same pattern with a sharp incline in the usage of
internet
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. Moving to a more detailed analysis, the 25-44
group
 started from 50% in 2003, following a result of 80 in 2006
In contrast
, the
age
group
 of 65+ did not even
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internet
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 in 2003
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 but began doing it only in 2004.
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