university shpould accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject

It is argued that educational
centers
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such
as universities should accept
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number
of men and women students
instead
of acquiring them due to their intellectual abilities. From my point of view, I completely agree with
this
statement.
To begin
with, the major factor for
this
supporting
this
idea is
gender
equality among all genders in
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world.
For instance
, in developed
countries
like the USA and Canada both
of
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genders
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equal opportunities to show their perspectives in
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sphere because they are accepting
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number
of male and female scholars.
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case
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world
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better
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place for everyone despite
of
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their
gender
, race, nation, and other special qualities.
However
, many developing
countries
like Syria and Iraq are having
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for females having high educational knowledge. But the way how other
countries
trying
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to have
same
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number
of men and women students inspire other women to get good conditions to study.
Furthermore
, another reason for making equal
gender
number
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is
good
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way to make workplaces more suitable for every person.
For example
, in
Kazakhstan
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most of the universities of information technologies
consists
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of male teachers.
In addition
, the political members in most Turkish
countries
are men, that
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conservative thinking for
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. So the solution
for
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problem
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the problem
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is
making
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similar
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a similar
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number
of male and female workers like in the USA parliament administration to prove the fact that occupation doesn’t have a
gender
. To conclude, I strongly agree that
gender
equality
one
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of the most important
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among academics. I think the idea of equal womankind and mankind should be spread
for
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a
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public. It will increase
the
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fair opportunities for everyone.
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