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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuus both views and give your opinion.

#university #education #job #hand #people #skills #discuus
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Education
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 undeniably is the strongest instrument which is responsible to shape one's future. Not only does it help us to grow overall as human beings it
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 plays an important role in the development of society as a whole . A contentious debate over the topic of whether completing a
university
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education
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 is a way to get a good
job
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 or getting experience and developing soft
skills
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 are more important is often ignited . In the forthcoming ,paragraphs we will elucidate the two viewpoints
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will be followed by my personal opinion. Over decades we have seen newspaper reports telling about companies offering good paychecks to
university
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students
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 .
University
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education
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 has been considered the
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 step after years of formal
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 and
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 a means to secure
a good jobs
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a good job
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. A
University
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education
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 makes an individual ready for the
job
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 market .
Students
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 can choose the courses that they want to specialize in and make their future in. Placements held at
university
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 offer
students
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 the to bag their dream
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.It
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 provides an opportunity to meet like-minded people.
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 Rajat Gupta who graduated from Harvard, Indra Noori from yale and many other CEO who has got ivy league
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However
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 over the past few ,
years
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 we have seen
a drastic changes
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a drastic change
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 in
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 approach where
students
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 have skipped
university
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education
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 and yet have got good jobs. There are several factors that are responsible for
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 changing trend .
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 more focus is being laid on
skills
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 than on
university
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 degrees. ,
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 with the advent of ,
interenet
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internet
 the knowledge is more readily available to learn online rather than just being confined inside
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 walls .
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concept
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 of entrepreneurship has revolutionized the trend . Several examples like Mark Zuckerberg, Steve Jobs and Bill gates are examples of individuals who have enrolled out of
university
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education
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 and have yet to make a mark To hammer the
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 nail, After considering all the above-mentioned points I would like to conclude that having good experience and soft
skills
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 are more important than a
university
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 degree and the upcoming generation should focus on developing their
skills
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 which can make them ready to get a
job
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 in the newly defined
job
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 market.
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