Some people think that professional athletes make good role models for young people, while others believe they don’t. Discuss both these points of views and give your own opinion.
It is
irrefutable
fact that sports players have been attributed to helping form stronger societal bonds and boosting self-esteem for the younger generation. Correct article usage
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While others
reject Correct word choice
Others
this
notion by saying they also
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youngster
. In my opinion, the former preposition appears more rational and in Fix the agreement mistake
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sides
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thus
leading to a logical conclusion.
To begin
with, there are myriad of
reasons which will Change preposition
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further
elaborate the trend but the most preponderant one
stems from the fact that sports leaders can also
play an important role
in addressing and raising awareness of key societal issues. In other words
, in
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pandemic
time, Sports Correct article usage
the pandemic
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players
they
have stepped up, trying to stop the spread of COVID-19. Another pivotal aspect of Correct pronoun usage
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this
trend is that most of the youth one
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follows
the same steps of Correct subject-verb agreement
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ladder
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the ladder
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as
role
models do. To exemplify this
, India great MS Dhoni said Sachin Tendulkar was his cricketing role
model and idol while
he grew up dreaming of becoming a cricketer. He received such
inspiration from his role
model and passionately achieved his success.
On the other side, some masses believe that athletes they
have millions of followers on their social media platforms, so if youngster sees their Correct pronoun usage
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role
champ doing the wrong thing they too will follow the
suit and it will dramatically affect the thinking process of Correct article usage
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instance
Pradeep Sangwan, who played for Kolkata Knight Riders in the sixth edition of the Indian Premier League in 2013, was the first Indian professional cricketer to be banned after he had tested positive for a prohibited steroid which was found in his urine sample Add a comma
instance,
this
threw bad image in front of the followers. Moreover
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every fan can reach Add a comma
technology,
to
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favorite
player and Change the spelling
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that is
not acceptable by many parents for their child because their child also
tried to take steps of the inspirational one
.
To recapitulate, according to
the aforementioned above one
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opponent is instrumental and beneficial to Correct pronoun usage
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society and Correct article usage
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Nevertheless
its potential drawbacks should not be overlooked either.Add a comma
Nevertheless,
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task response
Ensure that your essay fully addresses the prompt by discussing both points of view and providing a clear opinion.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction and conclusion need to be more developed and clearly state the main points of the essay.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.