Some people think that job satisfaction is more important than job security, while some people think that they cannot always expect job satisfaction, a permanent job is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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According to the world scenario today every person needs a
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to live. But most
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assume that
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satisfaction
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is more vital than
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security and others believe that
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don’t need
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satisfaction
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, having a permanent
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is enough to lead a lifestyle. The following essay will illustrate more regarding both opinions and in the latter ,part I will provide my opinion. To commence with, I believe that
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pleasure is far more important than having a
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permanently. Today
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work
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day and night to fulfil their requirements, and employers are forcing their employees to
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more than the given limit in order to compete with other competitors in the
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market.
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, at a very young ,age individuals get depressed due to their jobs which
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to diverse diseases
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as obesity and diabetes. As an example, one of my friends was earning a huge pile of money as she was a permanent employee in the IT business industry but at the end of the day she was stressed and she was not satisfied with the
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environment.
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, more than the
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a person has, it is important to consider the
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you get from the
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to continue it
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people
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easily get fed up with jobs in a short time period.
On the other hand
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, it is true in
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industry
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cannot find
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satisfaction
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, if they have a permanent
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they have to hold that
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because there are hundreds of employees who are unemployed. As the unemployment rate is increasing, the number of
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who are trying to stay in their
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is high even though the pay rates are low and the pressure of
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is high. According to research, the unemployment rate around the globe is 45% which is extremely high.
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, humans cannot always find a perfect and desired
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environment to
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they have to fulfil their needs with whatever
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they have. To conclude, I believe that
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satisfaction
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is important in order to continue the
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and have a stress-free lifestyle,
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, the
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market is very competitive so holding into one
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can be considered.
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