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Nowadays more and more people want to get things done instantly (services, information, tasks). Why is this? Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#people #services #information #tasks #development
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Undoubtedly, with the rapid change of technology,
people
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 who decide to complete
things
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 instantly has been becoming more common and normal. Whereas some
people
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 refer to
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things
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 done instantly as a good development, others think
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 it as a drawback and a block of revolution. As for my perspective, I consider the negative
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to overwhelm
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overwhelm
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 the positive
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ones
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. An array of reasons may lead to why finishing
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 instantly is a negative
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.
Firstly
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,
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 who have the ability to solve
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tasks persuade more effective and efficient of complete jobs. In the other words, those who want to save more time to get high outcomes or profit. It might be a good influence
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, sometimes completing
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 instantly might make
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 look down
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 services and think of
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them
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 as low prices.
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, as far as I am concerned.
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, only
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 on saving time might cause
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 to forget to focus on details in the long term and it
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 makes a number of mistakes which
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 do not want it
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. Take my experience
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. While I trying to solve the math examination as soon as possible, I make a lot of stupid mistakes
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 easy questions.
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, getting
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 done instantly might decrease the
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 of improving skills.
That is
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, rather than
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training
trainning
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training
basic
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in basic
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intresting
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interesting
 in using fast ways to deal with instant servicing and getting information. In conclusion, I consider the negative
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 of getting
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 done instantly to overwhelm the positive
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 of development due to it cause the frequency of stupid mistakes
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happen
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 more than before.
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