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Where did you study the primary school, a description, daily routine and anecdote and favourite teacher.

#study #school #description #anecdote #favourite #teacher
Currently, we remember a lot about primary
school
 due to
is
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ours
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firsts
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 steps
studying
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in studying
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, meeting friends,
even
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and even
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 the
first
 love. We didn'
t
 know that we would have many life responsibilities later.
This
 paper focuses on primary
school
. I studied in a
school
 called
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clip
chip
ceip
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 son Ferrer. It was a big
school
 with two floors. The
first
 one,
it
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was a floor for
children
 from
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6 to 8 age group. The
second
,
it
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was for older
children
 from 9 to 11 or 12 years old.
Moreover
,
in
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on
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 the
first
 floor had a big room
where
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children
 that couldn'
t
 go home after
school
 stayed there and ate.
Furthermore
, there were two places to play, one to play football or volley and the other with a ping pong table, which if you weren'
t
 one of the older
children
 you couldn'
t
 play. My daily routine was always the same. I got up early because
of
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I really
loved
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toloved
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stay
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staying
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at
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in
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bed
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the bed
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.
Then
 I had breakfast and went out to go to
school
 at 8:45pm. My funny anecdote
,
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 was
a
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about a
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day
that
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when
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 I decided to be my own fashion designer and cut my hair. I still remember my mum screaming. My favourite teacher was called Ramon. He was a history teacher. He was the funniest teacher that I ever had. He came to
school
 painted and with old clothes to look like an important character of history. To
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sump
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 up, I always remember primary
school
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with
which
whith
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with
 love because I met my
firsts
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first
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 long life friends and all that I had to do was play and enjoy life.
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