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Where did you study the primary school, a description, daily routine and anecdote and favourite teacher.

#study #school #description #anecdote #favourite #teacher
When
i
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I
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 was 18 years old, in 2010, I was studying in a high
school
 called
jimenez
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Jimenez
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 Montoya,
this
 high
school
 is in
baza
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Baza
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, a
Granada's
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Granada
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 village. The installations were very big,
for instance
, the garden needed a gardener
for
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to
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 keep the big garden area and there were two football
camp
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camps
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. It is undeniable that
the
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apply
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high
school
 is a hard study
time
 but, in spite of
this
, that
time
 was the best
time
 of my life. The class
started
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starts
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 at 8:00 o clock until 11:00 hours, at 11:00 o clock was the
time
 for lunch until 12:00 hours My mother made me a tasty sandwich for lunch but,
moreover
 I usually bought a sweet in the coffee shop near high
school
. Later, when the play
time
 finished, resumed the class until 2:00 o clock and later I caught the bus tor go my house.
For instance
, an anecdote happened during my play
time
 was... I lost my sandwich in the way from my class to the play
time
 area, nowadays I don't know where is my sandwich.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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