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Some people claim that museums and art galleries are not needed today become everyone can see historical objects or art works by computer. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is widely believed that
museums
 and
art
 galleries will not be essential these days since people are able to find ancient artefacts or
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art work
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 via the Internet.
However
, I am
the
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 opinion of those items are still
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valuable
valueable
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valuable
 in at least some respects. When it comes to the negative impact of being able to find
the
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historical objects easily, it can affect deeply on
economy
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. There are few people going the
museums
 and
art
 galleries in their country and even in the world.
As a result
, tourists will not have unique cultural and historical destinations to visit, and really, kids will not have an opportunity to witness what they have learned to develop their imagination. The importance of
museums
 and exhibitions cannot be overstated. The other bad effect is
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 the value of cultural heritage. By using search engines
such
 as Wikipedia and Google are unable to fully demonstrate the true value of artworks since computerized systems can’t preserve the quintessence of natural culture. The importance of
museums
 and exhibitions cannot be overstated. To conclude, everything both have two sides
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 society. Thanks to the
museums
 and
art
 galleries, these artistic values can be safeguarded in their entirety.
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  • virtual
  • digital
  • online
  • accessibility
  • inclusivity
  • cultural heritage
  • physical experience
  • immersion
  • local tourism
  • economy
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