Animal are in danger of extinction. Some people say that we should protect only those animals which are useful to humans. Do you agree or disagree with this.

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Many species are on the verge of extinction.There is a contentious argument over whether or not those
animals
who are considered important should be protected.
Although
it will save a lot of time and money if we only take care of useful
animals
, I firmly believe that every kind of animal plays a crucial role in our lives. All have their own importance and
this
essay will
further
discuss my views on
this
notion in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, all
animals
take part in making the surroundings better for humans. If we only concentrate on protecting those domesticated who fulfil our demands
such
as food,
this
can have adverse ramifications
on
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other areas.
This
is because Wildlife provides many valuable substances
such
as medicine which is the key factor influencing health standards.
For instance
,
frog's
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skin is used worldwide in order to develop antibiotics that
helps
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humans to overcome flu and fever.
Furthermore
, wild
animals
contribute significantly to the ecological system. If they are not protected, they affect us directly or indirectly.
Thus
, can destroy the balance of the system.To illustrate, creatures like spiders eat bugs
likewise
cats prey on mice, the bird eats a worm, and
as a result
, these breeds do not overpopulate which can be considered an indirect effect.
Furthermore
, a few species like ducks prey on insects which are dangerous for crops and
this
is how they help
in preventing
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the same. In conclusion,
according to
my perspective, each and every animal has their own influence on
this
world,
therefore
we should take measured steps toward the protection of all species rather than specific
animals
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that relates back to the main thesis of the essay.
task achievement
Provide more specific and relevant examples to support your points.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • biodiversity
  • ecosystem
  • extinction
  • intrinsic value
  • conservation
  • ecotourism
  • species
  • moral responsibility
  • utility
  • foreseen consequences
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