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What discovery in the last 100 years has been most beneficial for people in your country? Use specific reasons and examples to support your choice

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There are many extraordinary discoveries over the
last
 100 years which benefit the people of my country e.g telephone , advancement in the medical field, the agricultural revolution and many more. Through these ,discoveries life becomes more effective and easier. I believe the most important discovery in
this
 technological era
are
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 the easy and readily
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availability
availablity
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availability
 of the
internet
 facility to common people.
Firstly
, due to
this
internet
 access, people are more connected to not only each other but throughout the world with their loved ones.
Furthermore
, communication is extremely easy and access to information is very convenient.
Secondly
, the
internet
 provides a vast range of information which help to increase knowledge skills and understanding of individuals about any topic.
Moreover
, it is
also
 a great source of entertainment. A person can watch the latest videos and songs while sitting at home.
Thirdly
, the
internet
 has
also
 become a source of income as well. There are many online businesses which provide online clients which
facilitates
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 the business to
grow
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.Nowadays most employees are working work from home and provide services and skills at their convenience. In the end ,
i
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 believe the
internet
 is something which evolves every year. There are many advantages of the
internet
however
 there are
also
 disadvantages as well.
therefore
, one should be extra careful while dealing with the
internet
.
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