There are many reasons that can motivate a person to stay working for the same company. Some believe that money is the main reason. Do you agree or disagree?

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People are motivated to stay in the same job for many reasons, and a number of individuals think that money is the primary reason. I disagree that salary is the main factor because most companies pay a similar amount of money for the same task, and the culture of a company is far more important than monetary considerations. It does not make sense to say that money is the primary reason why people stay
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the same farm because for any office there are many companies all offering a similar salary.
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means that nobody needs to stay a work simply because they are being paid well. For example, a quick search on www.indeed.co.uk would show that, at any given time in London, there are over fifty jobs for human resource managers that all offer a salary of around £80,000 per year. What is more important is whether the population fit in with the ethos of the corporation. public thrive in different environments. Some prefer a workplace
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others like a more relaxed approach, with an emphasis on work-life balance. If a person feels as if the company culture is not in line with theirs, it can cause stress and, ultimately, their resignation.
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, well-paid jobs after they have children primarily because they value being able to spend more time with their families. In conclusion, I disagree that wages are the most important consideration when remaining in the same profession for a long period of time because if employees do not like their current business, they can simply move to another company and get paid more or less the same, and corporate culture is a far more relevant concern.
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