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Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is argued that during a visit to
foreign
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a foreign

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land
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land,

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 one must copy how people of there wear and act
whereas
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 others show their dissatisfaction saying that the prime nation has to accept the culture of other countries.
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 essay below will discuss both speculations
along with
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 my opinion.
To begin
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 with, mimicking the locals of foreign land
while
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 going there, gives the native community the feeling of similarity. They no longer have to feel awkward related to dress and attitude. To exemplify, when an international tourist visits Nepal especially, in the distant countryside of the Muslim community, they give weird looks to those wearing short dresses because their culture prioritizes wearing full-body dresses by females.
However
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, I think the new people
on the contrary
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 will feel uncomfortable doing so, as they
had
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 never done so in their province.
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, accepting visitors from another nation without showing any cultural indifferences helps to bring a sense of trust and understanding. They can freely
involve
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 with them,
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learn about each other's country;
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also
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can
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show the world how beautiful each other nation is.
For example
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,
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countries like the USA, the UK, and Australia, welcome warmly all kinds of people regardless of any cultural background.
Therefore
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, in my opinion, allowing guests to remain normal gives them a sense of freedom and a homely environment. In conclusion, performing exactly like the native population during a trip to another country makes folk feel burdened
hence
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, I am of the opinion, that the host country must accept cultural differences so that a
more
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 number of guests will flow where they can happily learn about each other cultural differences and support each other.

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task response
Ensure to address all parts of the task question and provide a clear opinion on the issue. Support ideas with relevant examples.
coherence and cohesion
Maintain a clear and organized structure with appropriate use of linking words and cohesive devices.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • cultural harmony
  • local customs and behaviours
  • host country's traditions
  • unintentional offense
  • enhance the travel experience
  • cultural fabric
  • inclusive society
  • diverse society
  • global understanding
  • mutual respect
  • respect for local customs
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