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An increasing number of schools provide tablets and laptop computers for students to use in school, replacing books and other printed materials like exams and assignments. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Actually, in
this
 developed world, with the advancement in technology and information
access
, some paper-based text is replaced by digital text, in my
further
 paragraphs will be discussed an interesting and important topic above all for children's parents. Initiating with the benefits and advantages, it is important to have in mind that fast
access
 to information is a fact and we cannot stop, because we need to support that and accept but to make a balance between both, printed and virtual documents.
Moreover
, the big information
access
 makes it easier to knowledge kids and teaching ways became more attractive for the child because are so interactive.
Also
, the school community support idea that moving all classrooms to the internet and making it one hundred
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 virtual, while students will
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have
access
 from any point around the planet.
On the other hand
, all new technologies and advances ever have a darker side, meanwhile for humans apply to,
for example
, in some countries like The United States, rise a new phenomenon in
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 behaviour, when they are overexposed to long virtual study hours, their concentration capacity decreases,
that is
 a scientific fact. According to The National Neuroscientists, Association the human race will be lost around forty
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 of focus and learning capacity in
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2050 year. To conclude, the best way to preserve virtual and printed books balance
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 is to teach both technologies importance, in schools, universities and colleges. Currently, we have
access
 to the two options but is important teach to new generations to be careful with print options that have not lost their magical meaning.
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