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living in the city is better than living in the countryside

#city #countryside
In my opinion, I think living in the
city
 is better.
My
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first
 reason why I think living in the
city
 is better is
because
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 there are higher salaries in the
city
 as compared to the
countryside
. Based on Google, the average salary for the
countryside
 in Singapore was $4680 per month, and the average salary for the
city
 in Singapore was $8450 per month. The difference was TWO TIMES more!!! So
now
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how
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 do you see that the higher salary in
SIngapore
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Singapore
 is to live in the
city
? My
second
 reason why I think living in the
city
 is better is
because
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 there are much more activities to do in the
city
 than in the
countryside
. Based on research, if you live in the same
city
 for 10 years, you will NOT get bored of the activities there, but if you live in the same
countryside
 for 10 years, you WILL get bored of the activities.
My
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last
 reason why I think living in the
city
 is better is
because
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 the transportation is much cheaper. In the
countryside
, when you take a train or bus, they will charge you around 5
percent
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 more than in the
city
. So for the above reasons and more, I think living in the
city
 is better.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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