Some people think that schools should reward students with the best academic results, while others believe it is more important to reward students who show improvements. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

A number of
students
being awarded, showing dapper remarks at their study places become a trend
instead
, those who improve their selves in their studies have neglected. According to some individuals, only those
students
are
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who are
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able to get prizes who retain valuable achievements but some are conflicted that we should look after those pupils
also
who show their learning abilities more than more in every section of exams as
like
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apply
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I have the same perspective on
this
essay I will explain
the
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both sides. On the one hand, it is not easy to score excellent marks in exams and study schedule are become scary day by day even though a number of books are included and the test session
are
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is
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one the
difficult
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most difficult
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task to do and it requires unlimited attention towards exams to achieve destiny, good scores or to get prizes.
For example
, In the curriculum when sallybus is exorbitant
then
it needs more attention.
Students
from the University of Padova in Italy have recently done
one
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research on
students
who spent their day and night to achieve a reward and sometimes they were disappointed when they did not
get
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.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
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