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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and traditional methods of food preparation. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

#convenience #foods #methods #food #preparation
In the
ear
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era
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 of urbanisation, fast
food
 consumption is
a
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taking a large proportion of consumer's life. Some people mentioned that original
foods
 will become less common and
it
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will get substituted by express
foods
 in the near future. Personally, I deem
this
 notion is not the case and I will explain my thoughts with references in the paragraphs below. There is no doubt that ready meals are providing a convenient way for our lifestyle, and
it
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 could
saved
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 plenty of
time
on
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in
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 preparing
foods
 compare to the original
ingredients
. A supportive example is the raw materials
are often have
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 to select from different locations or even spend extraordinary
time
 and money if the cooker missing
ingredients
 from their planned meal,
therefore
, if they utilise the faster packets of pre-cut or pre-cooked veggies and poultry
then
 more productive days can be gained from convenience
ingredients
 than originals.
Hence
, express
foods
 can reduce
time
consuming
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 and provide straightforward methods during cooking compared with
the
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traditional
foods
. In
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contrast
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contract
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contrast
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, some
society
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societies
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 through that taking too much fast
food
 is obviously not healthy for our life, in order to retain our quality lifestyle we should get the original item and refuse
the
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unhealthy
foods
 intakes.
For instance
, most
of
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express packed items are always full of saturated fat and high in sugar, without
to mention
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mentioning
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 hidden chemicals on the product labels. Those misleading information will indirectly cause
numbers
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 of health issues
on
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in
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 human life. For a positive option, we could consider stocking up a reasonable amount of leans and greenery at the refrigerator and do the meal prep in
advanced
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 to increase
healthness
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healthiness
healthy ness
. In conclusion, fast
food
 is
great
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a great
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 approach for many
urbanism
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urbanisms
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 and it might
saved
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save
be saved
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 us some
time
 and money,
however
,
this
 seems not a
long term
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 solution and it could perhaps damage our body system. In general, we should have
a balanced lifestyles
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a balanced lifestyle
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 by
minimise
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minimising
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 the impact of convenience
food
 and
maximise
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maximising
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 the benefits of taking original
ingredients
 to maintain a healthy
habit
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habits
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.
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