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Present a written argument or case to an educated reader with no specialist knowledge of the following topic. Should wealthy nations be required to share their wealth among poorer nations by providing such things as food and education? Or is it the responsibility of the governments of poorer nations to look after their citizens themselves? Use your own ideas, knowledge and experience and support your arguments with examples and with relevant evidence. You should write at least 254 words.

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It is being argued if rich
countries
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 are expected to share their resources with the poorer by providing basic amenities
such
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 as food and
education
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, or if it lies under the authority of the governments of the low-income
nations
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 to cater for their citizens. I opine with the initial view, and
this
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 essay discusses both points in detail. On the one hand,
nations
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 are considered to be poor mainly because they lack the resources required by their inhabitants.
That is
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 to say, the region does not have the required cash to be particular, to develop the area, which could be because of the position of the country or a legacy inherited.
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, Somalia requires the help of wealthier
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 to develop their infrastructure and to provide for the basic needs of its people.
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, it is vital for the higher authorities of
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countries
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, to maintain a healthy relationship with wealthier
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.
On the other hand
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, the richer
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 must lend a helping hand to the under-rated, by spending a portion of their investments on the needy ,especially in areas of
education
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 and food.
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,
countries
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 like India, where the
education
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 system is robust, should sponsor brilliant students of needy
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 for higher
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, as it will lead them to have brighter futures.
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,
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hunger which is dominating the low areas is a major cause of concern, and it is crucial that food packets are sent to the needy to sustain their lives.
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 to the above, items like seeds and livestock can be provided to the needed
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 to develop an earning for their people. In conclusion, in my opinion,
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 governments are ultimately responsible for their civilians, it is crucial that the wealthier
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 support the less wealthy
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 so that all human beings enjoy the world together.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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