Parents often give children everything ask for and do what they like. Is it good for children? What are the consequence when they grow up.

In recent years, it is considered to
fulfill
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the demand
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demand
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of
children
is very essential as it shows love and
care
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toward them.
Although
it is very good to provide everything
but
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fulfilling every demand can cause of careless attitude
of
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children
. According to my point of view, there should be
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check
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and
balance
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for
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bringing up
children
otherwise
it will lead them to be a selfish
personality
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. It is needless to say that in
this
competitive era everyone is running to upbringing
children
with their best, but the notion of providing everything should
considered
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be considered
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wrong. It is
nature
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the nature
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of
children
to desire
things
which they don’t have,
after
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and after
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having those
things
they don’t concern about
it
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them
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.
For instance
, some
children
have
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increasingly
wish
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to get play station because they are impressed by their
fellows
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gadgets, after having play stations they lose interest in
it
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them
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and demand
for
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mobile phones.
Consequently
, they are impressed by their surroundings and try to get each and every luxury which sometimes their parents can’t afford. Rather than valuing
things
,
children
are learning to love materialistic
things
.
On the other hand
, giving every luxury to
children
can damage their
personality
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personalities
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. Because it is human nature if he gets everything without effort he never values its importance.
In addition
to it, there should be a reward system for
children
so that they behave well to get something. Bringing up
children
is not a good task for parents, to exemplify, it is noticed that
children
of financially affluent families are more indulged in social evils as
compare
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to
middle class
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families and the reason behind
this
ethical gap is their financial status, their parents provide them according to their demands. Shortly, societies
who
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never run for materialistic
things
are no place other than heaven to live. To sum up, providing everything to
children
might be not good to some extent as
children
think it is their right to
fulfill
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demands,
additionally
, they should teach to do
effort
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the effort
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for getting something so that they can lead a happy and prosperous life
on
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their own.
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