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In order to solve traffic problems, governments should tax private car owners heavily and use the money to improve public transportation. What are the advantages and disadvantages of such a solution?

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 to reduce the congestion on roads from governments is to increase the tariff on individual
cars
 and spent more investment on public
transports
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 the policy will be discussed.
Secondly
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 the solution.
To begin
 with, the rise of tax
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 private vehicles can decline their numbers on the roads and the government can spend the income from that to improve and expand the public transportation system. With a great public transport system,
people
 might change their mind from using
cars
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 a bus or train to travel around a town or city
instead
. The number of
cars
 will be reduced from the decreasing
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demand and
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this
 could protect the environment from the gas emission from many
car
 engines.
On the other hand
,
people
 who are not live in the city would get
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 negative impact on their transportation. The
car
 prices will be very expensive and not be affordable for
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people
especially
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 the
low income
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 groups that usually stay outside the city. As governments usually focus
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 downtown and care less about developing rural areas. These areas
are
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lack
of
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public transport or
its
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 network is not wide enough to
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 the
local
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 as the cost of
the
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infrastructure
infrastucture
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infrastructure
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number of
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population is not
worst
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. If
people
 in
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rural areas can’t afford a
car
, they will face
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difficulty
on
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 their
traveling
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. To sum up, the policy for solving the traffic issues by increasing the tax on
the
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private
cars
 and transferring the income from that to encourage the public
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transportation
transportaion
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transportation
 system could reduce the number of
cars
 on the road for the benefit but it
also
 causes
the
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drawbacks for
people
 who are not in the network of the public transportation and can’t afford a
car
 on the difficulty of
traveling
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