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Criminality is growing among children and teenagers. Why is it growing and how should these criminals be treated?

#criminality #children #teenagers #criminals
Undoubtedly, criminality among young people is growing
day-by-day
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. Mostly, teenagers are a victim of
this
, due to the wrong guidance, or
an
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unethical family
surrounding
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.
Nevertheless
, no matter how old
children
 are, If they have incurred a
crime
,
then
 they should be treated like a criminal. Nowadays, violence in video games as well as
crime
 shows plays a vital role in the
mind
 of a young adult.
Moreover
, the surrounding of a family
also
 plays an
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 role in
children
's
mind
. If parents
acts
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 unethically,
then
 a child is going to learn the same thing.
Furthermore
, social media
also
 made a huge impact on
the
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children
's
mind
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minds
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;
firstly
, many Individuals show off their costly
things
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 social media
,
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 and gazing
sumptuous
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things
children
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 mental health get affected.
Secondly
, watching more
crime based
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 shows, or plays which are above their age limit
also
 make
impact
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in
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the
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teenager's
mind
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minds
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,
and
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make them do the wrong
things
, and make them a criminal eventually.
Finally
, and most importantly, friends of a teenager. If
company
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the company
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 of a child is not good,
then
 they do
the
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unethical
things
,
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 and ruined the life of an adult.
On the other hand
, If an Individual has done a
crime
,
then
 they should
treated
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 harshly, and
give
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 punishment according to their
crime
.
Moreover
, younger people do not have any exemption.
Government
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 created a jail for
a
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young
adult
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adults
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, and they serve their punishment based on their
crime
.
In addition
, If
children
 have committed a severe
crime
,
then
 their punishment should be according to it. To sum up, steps should be taken by the government as well as the
NGO's
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 by giving
right
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 knowledge to the young generation, so
a
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crime
in
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youngster
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youngsters
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 will stop, and they will make their life prosper.
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