New technologies and ways of buying and selling are transforming the lives of consumers? To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays,
technologies
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technology
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have made our lives better and
comfortable
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more comfortable
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. In one of them, we can say that online shopping technologies are the most contributing factor. There are many advantages compared to actually going to the
store
to buy in person, I believe that it is enough to change people's daily life. One of the reasons, we can buy everything, even
foods
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food
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. It used to be difficult to buy food from online stores, but with improvements in
technology
and new delivery methods, even food can be ordered online. It means that we don’t need to go to the
store
and bring heavy bags back to
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our houses
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houses
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. I think it is the biggest reason that online shopping spreads rapidly and people like to buy online.
Also
, we can refer
reviews
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to reviews
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of the products to buy. We can say that It is
advantage
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the advantage
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of online shopping. In online shopping, we can get information that cannot be obtained from the seller,
such
as fragility and defects, by looking at reviews that cannot be seen in actual shopping. I think that the review systems changed our criteria for choosing what to buy and we now sometimes look at Internet reviews even when going actual shopping.
Also
, we sometimes compare the price between
in
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real
store
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stores
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and
online
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an online
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store
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stores
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.
As a result
, many stores are forced to cut prices and improve service. In summary,
the
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online shopping is
technology
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a technology
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that changing our life and some people already can't live without online shopping. I believe that online shopping
technology
will make our lives more convenient and rich
,
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and that it is a valuable
technology
for all customers.
However
, some stores have to improve their services and make
price
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cheaper
by
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through
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online shopping.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • transforming
  • consumers
  • buying and selling
  • new technologies
  • revolutionized
  • consumer experience
  • e-commerce
  • convenience
  • range of options
  • mobile payment systems
  • transactions
  • challenges
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