You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practice in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: • describe what the group does • explain why the group is good for the community • suggest alternative days and times for practice
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Dear Mr John,
My name is Peter. I am
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member
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a memeber
memeber
of Correct your spelling
member
the
famous Correct article usage
a
musician
band Replace the word
music
which
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whose
name
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named
is
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apply
this
letter to get your attention towards to
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practicing
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practising
for
music for Change preposition
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upcoming
event at Add an article
an upcoming
the upcoming
community
hall. Add an article
the community
a community
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we want to Add a comma
,Moreover
practice
on Correct your spelling
practise
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Tuesday
Tuseday
and Friday. Correct your spelling
Tuesday
However
we come to know it is not possible for practicing Add a comma
,However
at
there.
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apply
In addition
that
, I want to elaborate Correct word choice
apply
about
our group. Our group doing Change preposition
on
musical
night Correct article usage
a musical
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concert
consert
in Correct your spelling
concert
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different
diffrent
cities. Correct your spelling
different
Furthermore
we are doing charity work which we will manage from our Add a comma
,Furthermore
earning
by every Correct your spelling
earnings
consert
.
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concert
we
our group Correct pronoun usage
apply
also
organize some Correct your spelling
competition
compition
for small kids and Correct your spelling
competitions
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handicapped
handycapped
people. As well we are Correct your spelling
handicapped
also
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organize
organized
oraganize
blood donation Correct your spelling
organise
camp
in Fix the agreement mistake
camps
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different
diffrent
states and cities. Above mentioned all Correct your spelling
different
activies
would be conducted by money which Correct your spelling
activities
is earn
by doing Change the verb form
is earned
same
type of event.
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the same
Finally
, I request you for
kindly Change preposition
to
give
permission to Change the form of the verb
giving
doing
practice for our event on Wrong verb form
do
mentioned
day or we can Add an article
the mentioned
also
do it on other day
like Sunday and upcoming public holidays.
I am waiting for your valuable Change the wording
another day
other days
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response
responce
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response
toward
my point.
Yours faithfully,
PeterChange preposition
to
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
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- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
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- however
- although
- even though
- despite