You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practice in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: • describe what the group does • explain why the group is good for the community • suggest alternative days and times for practice

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Dear Mr John, My name is Peter. I am

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member

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memeber

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the

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name

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Rockstar Band. Hope you are doing well. I am writing

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practicing

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music for

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we want to

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we come to know it is not possible for practicing

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we are doing charity work which we will manage from our

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like Sunday and upcoming public holidays. I am waiting for your valuable

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my point. Yours faithfully, Peter

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

196 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

ensemble
rehearsal
community engagement
cultural enrichment
public performances
diversity
inclusivity
musical education
alternative arrangements
schedule compatibility

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