You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practice in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: • describe what the group does • explain why the group is good for the community • suggest alternative days and times for practice

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Dear Mr John, My name is Peter. I am

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member

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memeber

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member

the

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famous

musician

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music

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band

which

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name

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Rockstar Band. Hope you are doing well. I am writing

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letter to get your attention towards

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practicing

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for

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music for

upcoming

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event at

community

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the community

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hall.

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we want to

practice

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practise

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Tuesday

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Tuesday

and Friday.

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we come to know it is not possible for practicing

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there.

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that

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, I want to elaborate

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our group. Our group doing

musical

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a musical

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night

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concert

consert

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concert

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different

diffrent

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different

cities.

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we are doing charity work which we will manage from our

earning

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by every

consert

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concert

. Not only that but,

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our group

also

organize some

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competition

compition

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competitions

for small kids and

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handicapped

handycapped

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handicapped

people. As well we are

also

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organize

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oraganize

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organise

blood donation

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different

diffrent

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different

states and cities. Above mentioned all

activies

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activities

would be conducted by money which

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by doing

same

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type of event.

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kindly

give

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permission to

doing

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practice for our event on

mentioned

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day or we can

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other day

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another day

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like Sunday and upcoming public holidays. I am waiting for your valuable

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response

responce

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toward

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my point. Yours faithfully, Peter

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firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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7Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
50Grammar mistakes
 

8 paragraphs

196 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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ensemble
rehearsal
community engagement
cultural enrichment
public performances
diversity
inclusivity
musical education
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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It has been claimed that workers over 50 are not resposilbe to rapidly changing ideas in the modern workplace and that for this reason younger workers are to be preferred. To what extend to you agree or disagree?

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