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The bar chart shows the
number
 of
visitors
 to three London Museums – National
Gallery
,
Victoria
 and
Albert
Museum
, British
Museum
 – between 2007 and 2012. As we can see, in 2007
Victoria
 and
Albert
Museum
 was the most popular, around 13
million
 people had visited the place compared to 6
million
visitors
 at the National
Gallery
. Over the years, the
number
 of
visitors
 at
Victoria
 and
Albert
Museum
 decreased radically: in 2012, the
number
 was just 10
million
. National
Gallery
 became even more popular: in 2007 the
number
 of the Annual
Visitors
 was around 6
million
, compared to 16
million
 in 2012. British
Museum
 was
also
 decreased between 2008 and 2010 but not as radically as
Victoria
 and
Albert
. In 2011, the
number
 increased to 12
million
 –
that is
 the value what the chart shows in 2007 too. In conclusion, National
Gallery
 was the
museum
 which increased the most.
Victoria
 and
Albert
 lost
visitors
, British
Museum
 basically did not change (except their bad period between 2008 and 2010).
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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