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More and more people prefer to buy readymade food from restaurants or convenience stores instead of cooking for themselves What are the advantages and disadvantages of this

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In
this
 age and
time
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 people wanted to purchase instant
food
 from
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supermarkets
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super markets
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supermarkets
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 or hotels rather than preparing
food
 on their own. The positive outcomes of the aforementioned concept are that they could spend more
time
 with their family and focus on their work, whereas the negative sides are that they might gain
over
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weight and end up with severe health problems. One benefit of
the
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buying readymade
food
 is people can spend their valuable
time
 with their loved ones. Nowadays with the increase in inflation around the world, both husband and wife use to work round the clock,
instead
 of spending the remaining
time
 in
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the kitchen
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kitchen
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 they can use
this
 as their family
time
.
Moreover
, they can concentrate more on their work or business so that they can improve their revenues.
Recent
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A recent
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 survey published
from
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 the TIMES OF INDA indicates that employees who
does
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 not spend their valuable
time
in
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on
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 household chores are the better performers. On the other side,
firstly
 people who consume fast
food
 regularly are prone to
obese
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, they can put up their weight easily because
of
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the quality of
food
 is definitely not good.
Additionally
,
the
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instant
food
 is vulnerable to
cause
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 diseases. An article which is published in the magazine for diabetes indicated that persons who are on fast
food
 for
continuous
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a continuous
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 week or two are showed higher glucose levels than the ones who eat
healthy
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a healthy
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diet
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. To conclude,
this
 essay has shown the positive outcomes of spending valuable
time
 with the members of the family and
increase
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an increase
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 in productivity for
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an employer
the employer
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employer
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employers
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 rather than cooking and
also
 discussed the negative sides like getting obese and deteriorating their own health by consuming
lot
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a lot
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 of readymade stuff.
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