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Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

#people #universities #offer #places #students #marks #ages #school
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it is said that
universities
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 young
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 to have good performance in school. Others believe that they should offer places for
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 even if
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 class.
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 there are good arguments in favour of
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 though
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 with good marks, I personally believe that
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 are for
everyone
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 who needs to acquire
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. on the one hand, there are several why
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 said
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 for better
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, many peoples thought
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students
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not
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and will
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 waste
much
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 time and many money at
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. The reason is that
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knowledge
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 is difficult and if
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 can not study, they will get bored and waste some things.
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, they thought
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 who did not do well at school influenced other
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 and dragged their achievements down.
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, undergraduates need to approach more
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,I would side with those who believe that university is for
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,
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knowledge
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 talk about social problems. A good example is that in psychology any professor always teaches
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 about the
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 and act of
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 in life, not just theory in books.
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,
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 is significant for all
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 so anyone
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 needs to study.
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, if
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reached
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taught
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 they will hard to find passion their self,
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 that can have huge consequences. In conclusion, while there are some
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people
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believe
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believe
 that
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a student
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students
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, I still agree with those who think that
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 and place in
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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