Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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it is said that
universities
just provide places
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young
students
to have good performance in school. Others believe that they should offer places for
everyone
even if
people
have
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mark
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marks
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at
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in
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class.
Although
there are good arguments in favour of
people
though
universities
offer
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a place
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to
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for
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young
students
with good marks, I personally believe that
universities
are for
everyone
who needs to acquire
knowledge
. on the one hand, there are several why
people
said
universities
just
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are just
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for better
students
.
Firstly
, many peoples thought
student
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students
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not
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are not
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good
will
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and will
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waste
much
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time and many money at
universities
. The reason is that
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knowledge
in
universities
is difficult and if
people
can not study, they will get bored and waste some things.
Secondly
, they thought
students
who did not do well at school influenced other
students
and dragged their achievements down.
However
, undergraduates need to approach more
people
to develop and study as well.
On the other hand
,I would side with those who believe that university is for
everyone
.
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Firstly
,
universities
not only teach
student
knowledge
but
also
talk about social problems. A good example is that in psychology any professor always teaches
students
about the
behavior
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behaviour
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and act of
people
in life, not just theory in books.
Secondly
,
knowledge
is significant for all
people
so anyone
also
needs to study.
By contrast
, if
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the student
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is not
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reached
teached
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taught
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they will hard to find passion their self,
they
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and they
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can
gaps
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in
knowledge
of
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and
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that can have huge consequences. In conclusion, while there are some
reason
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reasons
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of
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people
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believe
blieve
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believe
that
universities
just should be for
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a student
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student
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students
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with
good
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a good
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mark
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, I still agree with those who think that
knowledge
and place in
universities
for
everyone
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Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • merit-based
  • competitive environment
  • academic standards
  • innovation
  • diversity
  • mature students
  • equitable
  • inclusive admission policies
  • educational disadvantages
  • holistic admission process
  • extracurricular achievements
  • non-traditional students
  • equal opportunities
  • societal progress
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