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Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #universities #offer #places #students #marks #ages #school
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In recent years, the
students
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universities
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 become a topic of debate. While some people believe tertiary
education
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 is just reserved for talented young
students
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, the opposite is accepting
students
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 without ages and marks. In
this
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 essay, I am going to cite some justifiable reasons why
universities
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 should be for everyone. Obviously, the reason
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 tertiary
education
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 need to receive young
student
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 have high point.
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, young
students
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 can easily integrate
in
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 many different academic environments,
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and having
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 several talented
students
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 still increases the reputation of
this
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 university. Knowledge of
students
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 has a high mark which is huge
therefore
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 studying becomes not difficult.
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 top
universities
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 usually maintain the quality of
students
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 by recruiting excellent
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.
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,
government
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the government
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 focus on
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the high-marks
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high-marks
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student
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 due to they would not waste
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apply
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a
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talent. It is more difficult to train a
student
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 who does not do well than to train a
student
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 who does well, so hardly tertiary
education
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 would like to accept
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the good
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student
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students
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.
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, college should be for all ages, even if they have no good results. The
universities
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 accept everyone to express justice as well as
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non-discrimination
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, in the past, our parents or our
grandma- grandpa
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grandma-grandpa
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 could not afford to go to tertiary
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, now when they have more conditions, it is good for them to return
studying
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to studying
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, high school
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student's
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students'
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 report cards are unable to express the potential of each
student
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.
Due to each
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 province will have
the
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a
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 different way of
education
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 so some small
province
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provinces
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 will have average higher scores than central provinces like HCM city or Can Tho.
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that
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 each person will have a different
fortle
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force
forte
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, so it can not be judged on points. In conclusion, it is not advisable to admit
students
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 through scores or
ages
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age
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. Let everyone have a chance to study and expand
knowledge
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their knowledge
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • merit-based
  • competitive environment
  • academic standards
  • innovation
  • diversity
  • mature students
  • equitable
  • inclusive admission policies
  • educational disadvantages
  • holistic admission process
  • extracurricular achievements
  • non-traditional students
  • equal opportunities
  • societal progress
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