Many people say that universities should only offer places to young students with the highest marks, while others say they should accept people of all ages, even if they did not do well at school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, the
students
of
universities
has
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become a topic of debate. While some people believe tertiary
education
is just reserved for talented young
students
, the opposite is accepting
students
without ages and marks. In
this
essay, I am going to cite some justifiable reasons why
universities
should be for everyone. Obviously, the reason
of
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tertiary
education
need to receive young
student
have high point.
Firstly
, young
students
can easily integrate
in
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many different academic environments,
having
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several talented
students
still increases the reputation of
this
university. Knowledge of
students
has a high mark which is huge
therefore
studying becomes not difficult.
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top
universities
usually maintain the quality of
students
by recruiting excellent
students
.
In addition
,
government
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focus on
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the high-marks
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high-marks
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student
due to they would not waste
of
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apply
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a
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talent. It is more difficult to train a
student
who does not do well than to train a
student
who does well, so hardly tertiary
education
would like to accept
good
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the good
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student
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students
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.
Furthermore
, college should be for all ages, even if they have no good results. The
universities
accept everyone to express justice as well as
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.
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, in the past, our parents or our
grandma- grandpa
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grandma-grandpa
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could not afford to go to tertiary
education
, now when they have more conditions, it is good for them to return
studying
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.
Additionally
, high school
student's
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report cards are unable to express the potential of each
student
.
Due to each
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province will have
the
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a
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different way of
education
so some small
province
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provinces
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will have average higher scores than central provinces like HCM city or Can Tho.
Beside
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that
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each person will have a different
fortle
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force
forte
forty
, so it can not be judged on points. In conclusion, it is not advisable to admit
students
through scores or
ages
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age
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. Let everyone have a chance to study and expand
knowledge
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their knowledge
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.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • secondly
  • thirdly
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  • moreover
  • also
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  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • merit-based
  • competitive environment
  • academic standards
  • innovation
  • diversity
  • mature students
  • equitable
  • inclusive admission policies
  • educational disadvantages
  • holistic admission process
  • extracurricular achievements
  • non-traditional students
  • equal opportunities
  • societal progress
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