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Computers are often argued to be the most important inventions of last hundred years.To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#computers #inventions #years
It is true that
computers
 are a wonderful invention. I completely agree that one of
most
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 important inventions of
human
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 is
computers
.
Computers
 are an important invention because it changes
work
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 habit of human. In the past, we spent a lot of time
to write
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 a letter, a book or anything relevant to writing
language
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a language
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; our hand used to be harmful because we wrote too much.
In addition
,
handwriting
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the handwriting
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 of some people causes hard to
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the reader
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reader
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However
, when
computers
 are invented we could type in computer hours by hours that do not harm the hand and the speed
is
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improved more than many times over.
Besides
 that, typed letters
has
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 the
uniformnity
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uniformity
 on the whole
computers
, which helps us easy to recognize and read. Another
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function
funtion
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function
 that
it
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make
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computers
 becoming
an
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amazing device
that is
 to store
the
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information in bulk.
For example
, we can save our all
letter
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 on the computer without
many
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any
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 papers and easy to find
it
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them
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 again when we
need
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themneed
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. In the past, we used to have to use a lot of
papers
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 to store the information
while
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 it frequently damaged over years.
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Conclusion
, I totally agree that
computers
 are
important
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invention
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