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Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

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The table represents the
population
 census of New Zealand from the year 2011 to 2012. Overall, the entire
population
 had increased by 6 per cent, which was the same rate for 40-64 aged people, from 1,400,000 to 1,460,000. Meanwhile, both under 15 and 15 to 39 categories lowered by 2 per cent. It is noteworthy that from age group below fifteen to 39 got reduced by 2.0%, which shows that the
population
 numbers are going down. The number of elderly people
count
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counts
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 had significantly grown-up in the country in the
above mentioned
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above-mentioned
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 period.
Furthermore
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,
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all ages status
also
 rocketed by six-plus per cent. They need to focus on the young adults In summary, the
population
 ratio of New Zealand has moderately increased
although
 the
youngsters
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youngster's
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 count had decreased.
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