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Some people say that advertising encourages us to but things we really do not need. Others say that advertisements tell us about new products that may improve our lives. Which viewpoint do you agree with? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

#people #advertisements #products #lives #support
Recently, advertisements always become a hot issue in many debates, because of
its
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 influence
in
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people
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decision
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decisions
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 when buying
stuffs
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. Some
people
 said that it encourages
people
 to buy unnecessary things, while
the
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other think that it is beneficial for
people
 who want to find their
need
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. Personally, I prefer to see
this
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 marketing tools
in
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positive
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 perspective, since it is very useful to compare many similar products and find the most suitable one.
First
, advertising helps
people
 to know the brand of the
product
, which is usually associated with its quality and service.
Furthermore
, it
also
 shows the strength of the
product
, so the customers can consider the positive and negative sides,
although
 it is rare for
producer
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 to show its weaknesses.
Last
, it can be a tool for
people
 who wants to compare the price and choose the most valuable
product
.
However
, it is obvious that sometimes many companies give wrong information in their branding to win the competition. It can cause a really big problem
to
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 the customer, so it should be regulated wisely by the authorities. Advertisement policy could reduce the risk of
people
make
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 a wrong decision in buying
product
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a product
the product
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 and decrease the number of individuals that buy something which they do not really need. To sum up, advertising is one of
marketing
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the marketing
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 tools that
also
 can be useful for
public
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the public
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 in choosing the right
product
 or service for themselves. It helps
people
 to know the
product
 specification before making a decision to buy.
However
,
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the company
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company
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companies
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 should consider
the
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ethics when conducting
this
 activity, avoiding disinformation is a must.
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