Some people think that the most important function of music is to help people relax. What extent do you agree or disagree

Music -is the most unusual and wonderful thing in the world. It is
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I listen to
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every day if I have the time or sometimes when I paint
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because it inspires me. Even in sports, I go the house from his horns to the point where he gets him to the point
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it can relieve the pain. Singing can significantly reduce the intensity of pain, especially in geriatric care. Helps the heart. Studies have shown that when we
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to
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. we have improved blood function. After that music can
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slow the heart rate and lower blood pressure. And even reduces stress. When I worry about something I quickly turn the rock it really helps me. It relieves the symptoms of depression. When you are upset,
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lift your spirits,
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exercise. My headphones are always there for me for the reason that I really enjoy heeding to
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on the roads
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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