some people think that it is wrong to keep pets at home. do you agree or disagree

Some individuals believe that criminal
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should not be shown
on
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newspaper
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and television deeply because
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sort of
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has
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impact.
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essay agrees with
this
statement, as
children
have access to the
internet
nowadays and it can lead to some psychological problems. There is
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connection or
TV
almost
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every home and everyone uses it properly in their lives. Even, sometimes parents give phones to their babies for playing games.
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some
TV
shows or news with their parents at night.
Although
parents talk to their
children
about using
internet
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in a good way, youth could see some criminal incidents on these platforms. And it would be harmful
for
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children
to see
this kind
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of
scenes
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for
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their future life.
Other
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reason is that
to watch
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or reading
this
type of
information
on
internet
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could cause psychological issues.
First
of all, people who have medical problems could be affected
from
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these views.
Furthermore
, looking at or reading so much
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about
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impact people’s daily life negatively.
The
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recent study found that there is
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number of patients who apply
doctors
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. Most of them are afraid of
some
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murdering videos or
horrible
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movies on
TV
. In my opinion, people should not be allowed to watch these movies. In conclusion, as
children
use
internet
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widely in today’s world and criminal scenes affect people’s health in a bad way, I agree that
this
kind of
information
should
restricted
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on
internet
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and
TV
.
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