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Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doinf things they are familier with. Discuss both these attitides and give your own opinion.

#people #places #visit #food #doinf #familier #attitides
It is said that some individuals prefer
following
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 routine, while some wish to challenge themselves and try
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somethings
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 new.
However
, I entirely concur that
people
 ought to challenge themselves based on providing
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an opportunity
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opportunity
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 for exploration.
Firstly
, I believe that trying unfamiliar
stuffs
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stuff
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 allows us to explore ourselves. It is true that
travel
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 to some special
countries
,
such
 as Middle East
countries
 or eating insects in Thailand
are
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 completely new in our mind. Before trying them, you might reckon that those places are not tourist hot
spot
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 or it is crazy to put insects in
my
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 mouth.
In contrast
, you will never know what is your real expression unless you try it.
For instance
, a well-known YouTuber, Torres Pit,
love
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 to explore different
countries
, especially the places where
people
stereotyped
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are stereotyped
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 as dangerous or scary. He
wish
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 to change
people
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 stereotypical mindset by showing them the real picture of those places. As the old say, life is short, we should explore more and live without regret. It reveals that it is crucial to give yourself a chance to step out
from
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the
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 comfort zone and embrace all
the
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new things.
Nevertheless
, some argue that
live
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 with
the
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 fixed routine is comfortable. It is undoubted that some individuals hate changes, as they recognize changes are
somethings
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some things
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may
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 disturb their normal life. Take my grandma as an example, she stereotyped eating raw meats will hinder our health, as the meats include countless bacteria.
Therefore
, she
tend
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 to eat steak in
well done
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 condition rather than medium rare or rare. It reveals that someone
treat
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 new
stuffs
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stuff
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 as a threat in life so
that
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they tend to continue their own schedule.
In addition
,
people
 want to ensure their safety, as they reckon that new
stuffs
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stuff
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 might have to bear risk,
such
 as travelling to
a unfamiliar
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an unfamiliar country
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countries
, they have
sense
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a sense
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 of
worriness
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worries
worthiness
, like can they return home? On a whole, some tend not to try
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anything
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anythings
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anything
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 new due to
the
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a
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 sense of insecurity. In a nutshell, both sides have different strong arguments on
this
 notion.
However
, I strongly stand by embracing
latest
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 things
may
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that may
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 surprise us.
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