Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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There is no doubt that people choose to continue their

education

to get better job offers in the future.

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, I believe that there are more significant advantages which will be

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discussed

dicussed

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discussed

below. In today's world, having an occupation is one of the main struggles teenagers and adolescents face after graduating from high school,

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to apply

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universities to get higher

education

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is usually the result of some popular companies and

factories

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employment criteria, where they only employ

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professional

proffesional

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individuals with related university degrees.

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Honda

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car factory employs mechanic engineers

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have

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master

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degrees.

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encourages students to often take ongoing

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and internship programmes to get prepared for their future

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However

, I think there are other

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essential

essntial

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essential

benefits of having

university

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education

. Students can experience living in a place where they can find their own

life

goals and build a suitable

life

plan based on real educational experiences. It may appear that gaining academic achievements leads to much more satisfaction in

life

. They can

also

be gathered in communities of people with similar interests and learn how to connect and socialize.

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this

can provide a useful chance not only to find friends and partners

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but

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getting

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prepared for much larger communities in society. Overall, there is no

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effect

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the effect

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of university degrees on finding jobs.

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opinion that

further

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can impact many aspects of

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as socializing skills and setting

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plans for the future.

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