Some people believe the aim of university education is to help graduates get better jobs. Others believe there are much wider benefits of university education for both individuals and society. Discuss both views and give your opinions.

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There is no doubt that people choose to continue their

education

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to get better job offers in the future.

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, I believe that there are more significant advantages which will be

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discussed

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below. In today's world, having an occupation is one of the main struggles teenagers and adolescents face after graduating from high school,

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universities to get higher

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is usually the result of some popular companies and

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employment criteria, where they only employ

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professional

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individuals with related university degrees.

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Honda

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car factory employs mechanic engineers

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degrees.

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encourages students to often take ongoing

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and internship programmes to get prepared for their future

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, I think there are other

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benefits of having

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. Students can experience living in a place where they can find their own

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goals and build a suitable

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plan based on real educational experiences. It may appear that gaining academic achievements leads to much more satisfaction in

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. They can

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be gathered in communities of people with similar interests and learn how to connect and socialize.

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can provide a useful chance not only to find friends and partners

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prepared for much larger communities in society. Overall, there is no

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effect

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of university degrees on finding jobs.

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, I am more of

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opinion that

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education

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can impact many aspects of

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as socializing skills and setting

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plans for the future.

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