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More and more people are moving away from agricultural background to relocate to cities in order to look for work. what will be the consequences of this. what solutions can you offer.

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Individuals have learnt to mould their lifestyles with the advancements of society while people from farmer's backgrounds are migrating to urban places to find
work
 opportunities.
This
 essay will shed some light on specific results behind
this
 approach along with possible measures to tackle
this
 situation. To inaugurate with, the most conspicuous conclusion is the lack of agriculturists in society. If everyone wants to go to big cities to seek
work
then
 the day is not far away when there is a lack of food production.
Moreover
, only a few farmers will be left. Moving to the solutions, people should accept farming as a
work
 and try some unique ideas in their styles which will develop their thinking and give them profits. To exemplify it, they need to grow up something
such
 as vegetables, multigrain and new seeds while using fields for cow, goat and buffalo farming
also
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 for them.
In addition
 to
this
, creating own opportunities in villages is necessary for the future of farming. In a nutshell, transfer from villages to cities is common in
this
 era for
work
 but it is resulting a the distinction between farmers and people need to modify farming ways to get good profits and they should not leave farming.
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