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In many countries, more and more women have full-time jobs as men, so there is logic that men and women should share the household tasks equally. To what extent to you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, in
this
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 modern era, we find women in higher positions of jobs
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 as CEO or executive of a company, managers, team leaders, and many more.
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, in many cooperative sectors, both men and women
work
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 full time which makes them a deficit of time at
home
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. Is it possible to be productive every day at
work
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 despite doing all the
household
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 chores? So, for that, both of them have to share
household
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tasks
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 equally and I completely agree that sharing housework eliminates stress and burden from an individual
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 creates a stronger bond between them. After working for a full day, a
person
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 usually gets exhausted and would like to relax at
home
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 but gets stressed out if he/she continues to
work
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 again at
home
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. So, if a partner shares a piece of
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 it would not be a burden on the other. For a
person
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 to be productive, and enthusiastic at
work
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, one should have a free mind.
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, if a partner shares equal
work
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 like dropping the child at school, doing the dishes
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 the other picks the child back from school, and doing groceries, would not stress anyone with anxiety, depression, and health issues which could affect
work
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 performance. Though sharing
household
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tasks
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eliminate
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 health problems, it even creates understanding and affection between a couple. When
work
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 is divided, communication and the well-being of other
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 comes into account, which means when someone cannot do it
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work
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 or health appointments the opposite
person
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 can proactively resolve the issue by communicating and understanding.
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, if a woman
got
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 a dental appointment and
could not
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 make a meal,
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 a man can proactively cook or
can
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get a takeaway.
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 creates a pleasant atmosphere among a couple and
understands
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 that one might be overwhelmed by other
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. So, completing
household
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tasks
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 unites a family without
pressurizing
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 anyone.
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, for a full-time working woman, it is best if the couple divides their house chores to remove strain on a
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 and even bring livelihood among them. I believe, there should not be any discrimination that women only have to do housework, both genders can joyfully complete
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.

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Task Achievement
Make sure each point is clearly stated and supported with examples.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use linking words such as 'firstly', 'secondly', and 'finally' to connect your ideas better.
Task Achievement
You provide strong examples that illustrate your points well.
Coherence and Cohesion
Your introduction clearly states your position on the topic.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • equally
  • household tasks
  • jobs
  • women
  • men
  • share
  • relationship
  • teamwork
  • chores
  • balance
  • education
  • skilled
  • contribute
  • stress
  • partners
  • strengths
  • weaknesses
  • respect
  • efficiently
  • fair division
  • mutual appreciate
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