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Some cities band private cars from entering centre and force people to use bicycles and buses. Do the advantages of this

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the policy of country not allowed
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individuals to drive into the core of
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the city
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 their personal transportation and
government
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drivers
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utilize bicycles or public transport. I think
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 is
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way
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 to control
traffic
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 in big
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 and in
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 essay I argue that the advantages of
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 will
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 weigh the disadvantages. Nowadays we are living in the
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world where
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technology is well developed and of
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 it creates perfect conditions for mechanical engineering too, but in
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situation
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 the number of countries the city
centers
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 of cars and it is getting difficult to move. In
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situation
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 the government is recommending
to use
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simple
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a simple
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 and compact
type
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types
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 of
transports
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transport
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such
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 as bicycles or not expensive public buses,
instead
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 of private cars, because
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this
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way
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government
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 is able to control not only
traffic
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 jams in
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areas
area
ares
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areas
,
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also
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but also
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 the health quality of people too.
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, if almost everybody will go to study or work by bicycle they are able to reach their destination without any
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traffic-problems
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traffic problems
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, especially in the
centers
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centres
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 of
city
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the city
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, because it would be just difficult if they go there by car, because
of
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why? Of course because of
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traffic
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jam
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.
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other
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 side in
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 situation using buses is
more
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way
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 for people who is in a hurry, because buses always move on the one correct plan without any errors in the graphic.
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, it would be difficult for people especially
who
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those who
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 wants to reach their destination
any
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many
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times
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, in the morning or even in the middle of
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the night
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 in extreme situations,
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 as to go to the hospital or
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som
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some
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 kind of places like
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situations
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 there is only one
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 to get into the central hospital in a hurry by private car.
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, in one of the most urbanized
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,
in
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Singapore
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 the driving system of cars
is
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strongly
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 controls by the police of that country
,
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 so
that
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perhaps
there
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their
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traffic
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 jams are lesser rather than
other
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in other
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areas
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. In conclusion, the
way
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 of using
simple
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a simple
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 but effective kind of translation is
more
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a more
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especially
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 in the central
areas
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 of
country
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the country
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 where is
almost
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an almost
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 everyday
traffic
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 jam and it would
better
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 to control the city’s mechanical system.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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